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Jack's Profile - Before and After

We couldn’t convince Jack to put a picture in his profile, so the second best thing is to address it in a straight-forward and humorous manner right from the start. But if at all possible, use a picture! Most people click the “photos only” box right at the beginning of their search. If you don’t have a photo, who’s missing your profile? Jack is a nice guy but his profile makes him sound bitter and superficial. One of the things we noticed right off was the mixed message about the kind of relationship that he wants. He says he’s interested in a serious relationship, but his specified age range (18 to 29) and emphasis on physical beauty suggest otherwise. Plus his “don’t bother writing” statement is hostile and a turnoff. Remember, you don’t have to write back to everyone who writes to you. So what if a 45-year-old woman who he doesn’t think is cute writes to him? No big deal. He can always delete the message. His perceived impatience and pickiness will only hurt him if a beautiful 25-year-old woman is turned off by what she reads and moves on to the next guy. Last, notice the substitution of the word “grounded” for “no headgames.” The idea is the same but the message is less negative.

JACK BEFORE

JACK AFTER

"Looking for a partner in crime"

I am a: 40 yr old man
located in: New York, NY
Seeking: 18 to 29-year old woman within 5 miles of NYC

ABOUT ME:

I'm an attractive, smart, athletic, hardworking lawyer who lives and works in Manhattan. I love to travel and I have been to many cool places. I enjoy staying fit and I work out regularly. I like dining out, dancing, museums, Broadway shows, and wine tasting. I am equally at home at a Yankee game, a jazz club or at Starbucks on Sunday reading the NY Times, I have a great group of friends but most of my friends are now married with kids, so I thought I’d give this a shot.


Appearance

Height: 6' 0" (183 cm) Hair color: Dark Brown
Eye color: Green
My body style: Athletic and toned
Best Feature: Abs

PERSONALITY AND INTERESTS

For Fun: I love to travel. I spend my free time working out, hanging out with friends, playing golf, or spending time with my family (the most important people in my life).

5 things i cant live without: Golf clubs (that counts as 1, right?), good wine, New York Times, mp3 player, cell phone (have to admit it)

Sports and Exercise: Cycling, Golf, Tennis / Racquet sports, Running, Skiing

Common Interests: Business networking, Coffee and conversation, Dining out, Movies/Videos, Museums and art, Music and concerts, Travel/Sightseeing, Watching sports, Wine tasting

LIFESTYLE

Exercise Habits: Exercise 3-5 times per week
Daily Diet: Healthy
Smoke: Cigar aficionado
Drink: Social drinker, maybe one or two
Job: Lawyer Income: over $150,000
My Place: Live alone
Have Kids: None Want Kids: Definitely
Pets: none

BACKGROUND AND VALUES

Ethnicity: White/Caucasian
Faith: Christian/Catholic
Education: Graduate degree
Languages: English Politics: Moderate

ABOUT MY DATE

Hair: Any
Eyes: Any
Height: 5’ 4” to 5’ 7”
Body Type: Slender, Athletic and toned
Languages: Any
Ethnicity: White / Caucasian
Faith: Any
Education: Bachelors degree, Graduate degree, PhD / Post Doctoral
Job: Any
Income: Any
Smoke: No Way, Occasionally, Trying to quit
Drink: Social drinker, maybe one or two
Have Kids: No
Want Kids: Definitely

I am looking for a beautiful woman, inside and out, who is sexy, confident, and up for an adventure. I want to date someone who is seriously looking for a relationship and someone who has her head on straight. No headgames, please. And I hate to admit it but looks do count. If you don't look like your picture (or don't have a picture), don't bother writing.

Looking for a partner in crime

I am a: 40 yr old man
located in: New York, NY
Seeking: 18 to 29-year old woman within 5 miles of NYC

ABOUT ME:

Insert picture here! I can’t put my picture up here because of my job, but I will send pictures on request. I'm an attractive, smart, athletic, hardworking lawyer who lives and works in Manhattan. I love to travel and recent trips include Spain, Costa Rica, Japan, and Australia. I enjoy staying fit and I work out regularly. I like dining out, dancing, museums, Broadway shows, and wine tasting (a new hobby but I still need some help!). I am a huge Yankee fan but I also love exploring little jazz clubs all over the city. I have a great group of friends but most of my friends are now married with kids...my best friend met his wife here so I thought I’d give this a shot.

Appearance

Height: 6' 0" (183 cm) Hair color: Dark Brown
Eye color: Green
My body style: Athletic and toned
Best Feature: Abs

PERSONALITY AND INTERESTS

For Fun: I love to travel. I spend my free time working out, hanging out with friends, playing golf, or spending time with my family (the most important people in my life).

5 things i cant live without: Golf clubs (that counts as 1, right?), good wine, New York Times, mp3 player, cell phone (have to admit it)

Sports and Exercise: Cycling, Golf, Tennis / Racquet sports, Running, Skiing

Common Interests: Business networking, Coffee and conversation, Dining out, Movies/Videos, Museums and art, Music and concerts, Travel/Sightseeing, Watching sports, Wine tasting

LIFESTYLE

Exercise Habits: Exercise 3-5 times per week
Daily Diet: Healthy
Smoke: Cigar aficionado
Drink: Social drinker, maybe one or two
Job: Lawyer Income: over $150,000
My Place: Live alone
Have Kids: None Want Kids: Definitely
Pets: none

BACKGROUND AND VALUES

Ethnicity: White/Caucasian
Faith: Christian/Catholic
Education: Graduate degree
Languages: English Politics: Moderate

ABOUT MY DATE

Hair: Any
Eyes: Any
Height: 5’ 4” to 5’ 7”
Body Type: Slender, Athletic and toned
Languages: Any
Ethnicity: White / Caucasian
Faith: Any
Education: Bachelors degree, Graduate degree, PhD / Post Doctoral
Job: Any
Income: Any
Smoke: No Way, Occasionally, Trying to quit
Drink: Social drinker, maybe one or two
Have Kids: No
Want Kids: Definitely

I am looking for a sexy, confident, grounded woman who is beautiful inside and out. She should love to travel and, like me, be up for an adventure. I am ready for a serious relationship and I want to meet someone who wants the same thing.

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